sorrow’s train


squabs hatched near old depot
downy nestlings have flown
lonesome dove cries softly
for orphan far from home

destiny now switches course
where railway freight cars roam
wail of distant train horn
calls orphan far from home

mothers, father, grandparents
took one-way ticket loan
my heartsong of mourning
as orphan far from home


Meeting the bar at dVerse poets pub with Laura Bloomsbury’s challenge to write “epiphora” with watery eyes and repetition…

26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jun 06, 2021 @ 09:51:19

    I can read so much more in the poem than the baby doves… lovely with the repetition.


  2. Helen Dehner
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 15:36:25

    Orphan far from home, an immediate image / emotion comes to mind. A lovely write.


  3. Ingrid
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 10:28:37

    I can hear the ‘lonesome whistle’ of the train through your lines here Lynn – a sad tale and poignantly told!


  4. memadtwo
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 10:22:52

    That is a hard place to be. (K)


  5. rothpoetry
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 08:09:11

    Very nicely done Lynn! I love the ducks… and the parents and grandparents taking their last trip home!


  6. merrildsmith
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 07:41:27

    Lovely and sad. That repeated orphan line works well.


  7. Laura Bloomsbury
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 05:37:08

    “orphan far from home” – what a sad and memorable line for your repeats – well-done Lynn


  8. areadingwriter
    Jun 04, 2021 @ 02:32:24

    felt this to my bones, Lynn. I sing and mourn the same song.


  9. Tricia Sankey
    Jun 03, 2021 @ 21:25:48

    That yearning to be home is powerful in this! The repetition works perfect!


  10. Lucy
    Jun 03, 2021 @ 21:06:29

    So beautiful and sad. ❤


  11. Susan Joy Clark
    Jun 03, 2021 @ 20:35:21

    Interesting images with the birds, train and tying it all together with the orphan theme.


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