don’t taste the slush


gutter drips

january thaw

snow piles are shrinking away

sun warms bare branches of naked trees

dirt exposed




Like cinquain: 5 lines, but “oddly”modified syllable pattern (see previous post).

Linking to Tony’s “meeting the bar” challenge at  d’VersePoets!


19 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Gabriella
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 11:17:58

    Exactly what I can see from my window, Lynn!


  2. georgeplace2013
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 09:29:06

    Yeah, not a pretty sight… I’m ready for some green. Perfect picture you painted.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 09:21:20

    So much like the weather here… I want ice and snow first… Spring should be far away…


  4. Misky
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 08:34:33

    A nice progression of thought.


  5. Mary
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 08:04:58

    So very true. We are not at that point yet, having 12 degrees here…but I know when all that stuff will melt we we have the same….before the greening, which makes the dirty slush a thing of beauty for me. Smiles.


  6. Sabio Lantz
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 04:54:25

    Fantastic snap shot — full of feeling for the seasons’ transition


  7. Tony Maude
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 02:27:30

    Lovely, hopeful use of the form, Lynn. I hope the thaw doesn’t prove to be short-lived


  8. MarinaSofia
    Jan 30, 2015 @ 00:38:29

    Ha, what a title! Love it! This does have a very Japanese haiku feel to it.


  9. Bryan Ens
    Jan 29, 2015 @ 22:46:06

    “don’t drink the slush” – good advice indeed! It’s nice to see poems about the hope of spring in the wintertime.


  10. Kathy Reed
    Jan 29, 2015 @ 20:56:52

    …it’s the in between stages of winter and spring that are not so attractive..


  11. bmiller007 (@bmiller007)
    Jan 29, 2015 @ 20:51:43

    but we havent really had any snow yet!
    they say maybe monday…i think many are already pining for spring….


  12. ManicDdaily
    Jan 24, 2015 @ 14:23:13

    Feels somehow like the drips, with the clever line breaks. Thanks. k.


  13. wolfsrosebud
    Jan 24, 2015 @ 12:02:20

    that dripping brings hope… liked the simplicity of this


  14. Victoria C. Slotto
    Jan 23, 2015 @ 16:47:58

    If only you could send some of that slush to our poor drought-stricken part of the world. You paint the picture of the snow melt so clearly, Lynn.


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