caws and effect

Linda tends dVerse Poets Pub today and invites us to write ekphrastic poetry inspired by the artwork of Jackie Hurlbert…


sassy young redhead named penelope
decides who in the world she wants to be

dark ravens perch upon each shoulder
speaking words that make girl feel bolder

independent defiance paints hot lips
her arms cross tight or hands on hips

fiery moods untamed, doesn’t give a care
determination steeps in eyes that stare

penelope’s ravens sing rebellious song
this teen believes ravens make her strong!

(but raven words may spell trouble
and raven beaks may burst her bubble)



“Conspiring With Ravens”

27 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. calmkate
    Jun 26, 2019 @ 15:39:16

    passionate writing … which way will she go


  2. Mary (tqhousecat)
    Jun 22, 2019 @ 06:40:56

    The in between teen…You describe her so well! Of every season, I am truly glad I will never have to repeat.


  3. robtkistner
    Jun 20, 2019 @ 11:18:16

    Wonderful interpretation of Jacquline’s art. Love the ravens. Well written Lynn.


  4. memadtwo
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 16:01:35

    She does look determined and strong. Ravens are good companions for that. (K)


  5. rothpoetry
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 15:38:47

    I love your poem. The form works so well to tell her story!


  6. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 14:35:34

    I think Penelope will be just fine… maybe a few small lessons before she sail into adulthood with the help of her ravens.


  7. Frank Hubeny
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 11:00:02

    Good warning about the beaks of birds. The first thing I thought when seeing that painting were her eyes were too close to their beaks. But that is what made the painting intriguing.


  8. Christine Irving
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 10:23:34

    I believe all teens should have a totem to replace the imaginary friend they (you know who they are) take away too soon. Teens regain autonomy with defiance and need their trusted confidants to see them through safely. Hope you send this to a teen zine somewhere.


  9. Grace
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 21:08:45

    This is a defiant and bold stance – I love how you created a strong character.


  10. Kathy Reed
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 18:17:33

    Very appropriate and clever take on the painting.


  11. msjadeli
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 17:17:39

    An empowered modern young woman is what I’m hearing.


  12. Carol J Forrester
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 16:48:04

    My niece is starting her GCSEs and I’ve just started working on a poem for about being bold, strong, and independent.
    We all need these ravens sometimes.


  13. Dr. Crystal Grimes
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 16:35:11

    Well done, I could just picture Penelope, perhaps because I’m a redhead myself. 😮


  14. Charmed Chaos
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 16:32:15

    Oh, I adore this! This so reminds me of my daughter when she was young- always independent and defiant.


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