Meeting the bar and modifying it at dVerse poets over-the-top prompt!
tortoise-ical tutor
obfuscately attempts
sea-weedy conversation
with dog-paddling spanglish
-as-a-second(third?)-
language student.
both adults, babble-on
with mermaid tongues,
wordy fusillade slippery
as school of lingual fish;
all eager shimmering scales
while meaning flip-flops crazily
across (un)intended beach.
perhaps it’s more than
enough (enough already!)
to sit smallish-ly together
on interpretation’s vast sands;
tossing vocabulary pebbles into
non-verbal waves of understanding.
Sep 08, 2015 @ 07:06:06
Loved revisiting. a lot of fun. K.
Aug 31, 2015 @ 23:54:33
Love the convolution!
Aug 31, 2015 @ 19:39:12
Lynn, such wonderful and creative language here. Really cool. K.
Aug 31, 2015 @ 20:30:03
thanks, K !
Aug 29, 2015 @ 14:15:23
Oh, Lynn, what delicious modifiers you chose! If I were offering Wordles, I would cull words from this poem.
Aug 29, 2015 @ 21:09:56
Thank you for the compliment, Victoria!
Aug 29, 2015 @ 11:55:56
both adults, babble
with mermaid tongues,
LOVE that and so many other unique pairings…this is great, lynn!
Aug 29, 2015 @ 21:07:12
I appreciate your saying so, Hannah.
Aug 29, 2015 @ 09:04:51
I love the creative word pairings like spanglish and school of lingual fish ~ Sometimes non-verbal cues works when words fail ~ Excellent response Lynn ~
Aug 29, 2015 @ 09:43:12
Thanks, Grace!
Aug 29, 2015 @ 08:32:19
Ha, you have definitely used an adequate number of modifiers in your light-hearted poem!
Aug 29, 2015 @ 09:42:30
🙂
Aug 29, 2015 @ 01:14:08
Ha. Yes you can indeed obscure the image by using those modifiers though I like the mermaid tongues.
Aug 29, 2015 @ 05:50:05
It was fun…thanks, Bjorn.
Aug 28, 2015 @ 23:21:40
Very generous use of adjectives for a modifier effect. Great job Lynn!
Hank
Aug 29, 2015 @ 05:49:15
Thank you kindly, Hank.
Aug 28, 2015 @ 22:47:40
Well hmm.. sister Lynn is at the end again..
And guess what this is just pure fun..
it’s fun to be silly in modifying
poetry as silly as silly can be..
PLAY.. a forgotten art of
most humans and
we need a tent
revival
to get
PLAY
BACK
BRAVO
YOU ARE AN
EXCELLENT PLAYER
IN THE ART OF MODIFIER!..:)
Aug 29, 2015 @ 05:48:41
I thank you, bro’!
Aug 29, 2015 @ 07:46:50
Indeed, an excellent player.
Obscured language or a new language?
I can easily imagine a sea-weedy conversation
Aug 29, 2015 @ 09:41:43
Conversation can be tangled even without new language barrier 😉 Thanks for your comment.