we mark a dark yet holy day
when Light himself was crucified
condemned by men, unjustly tried
son suffered, father turned away
wrapped up in gloom, laid in cold tomb
“now God is dead!” the demons say
to save from shadow’s curse, light died
we mark a dark yet Good Friday.
a poem in my pocket 
Mar 28, 2016 @ 07:53:22
The change from your first to final line brings extra power to am already powerful poem.
Mar 28, 2016 @ 10:56:01
Thanks for your comment, Bryan.
Mar 27, 2016 @ 17:01:16
A powerful poem that along with recently watching The Passion, has vividly reminded me of the sacrifice made for us.
Mar 27, 2016 @ 17:46:25
What wondrous love is this…
Mar 27, 2016 @ 12:17:04
Beautiful Good Friday Octain ❤
Mar 26, 2016 @ 17:30:41
Beautifully constructed – it supports the message so distinctly and perfectly. I forget how this poetry form forces one to find the right rhymes and just the right amount of text. Lovely.
Mar 26, 2016 @ 17:35:02
Yes, I enjoyed working within the form…
Mar 26, 2016 @ 00:40:48
YES. Perfection.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 21:07:46
Rhyme and format well done. I like how you captured the “darkness” of this day.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 22:54:41
Thanks, Ginny!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 19:39:46
this so well expresses the feel of this day
Happy Easter
Mar 25, 2016 @ 22:54:11
May you have a blessed Easter too 😊
Mar 25, 2016 @ 19:11:45
You describe the narrow-mindedness and cruelty of some human beings so well with the line “when Light himself was crucified.” Very well done, Lynn.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 18:23:20
Yes, another Good Friday! I have wondered…why the name Good Friday….when the happenings are not at all good!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 20:34:17
Awful for him, ultimately good for his followers!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 16:13:46
Timely and contemplative, Lynn!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:41:25
Created a fitting atmosphere with this poem.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:26:55
Oh so well done, Lynn, and how timely.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:50:11
Thank you, Viv.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 12:52:56
This is a wonderful Octain, Lynn. The line that got me was the one about the Father turning away, as I’ve been reflecting a lot on the feeling Jesus had of being abandoned by the Father.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:48:10
He was abandoned so we never will be.
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:52:37
Ah, yes!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 12:48:59
Very timely for Good Friday Lynn:
to save from shadow’s curse, light died
we mark a dark yet Good Friday.
Also love the mid-rhyme of gloom/tomb ~
Happy Easter !!!!
Mar 25, 2016 @ 13:49:18
Thank you, same to you 😀