winter magic

Having fun with poetics prompt at dVerse poets today…join in!


first big snow of the season,

school buses absent on the road

it’s late morning and time

to break out decorations

from the dust in frigid attic.


after i rearrange mysterious closet

clutter on deep stairway

up to attic, my son unlatches

strange little door at top,

hunches over to squeeze inside.


he mumbles something about mice

which i choose to ignore and

wait for him to reappear

with the first box of

green garland, tinsel, and shiny balls.


the long Christmas tree box comes

out first with a squeaky –  Got it, mom?

and holding up the other end

i see two hand-sized

furry paws, matched claws.


i’m surprised by round ears and

beady eyes where my son’s face

belonged;  i’m ready

to exclaim shock

as i grasp box,

then find i’m balancing with my tail…


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31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. januarygerry
    Dec 03, 2015 @ 15:28:12

    I looked again with a a start ,,,and was startled! Very good!


  2. Sherry Marr
    Dec 02, 2015 @ 10:30:11



  3. Debi Swim
    Dec 02, 2015 @ 10:15:35

    Lovely… if I have to change, let it be a mouse.


  4. MarinaSofia
    Dec 02, 2015 @ 01:08:29

    Aw, shucks, you are such a natural at this! Just loved this fun (yet disturbing) story.


  5. thotpurge
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 22:19:52

    That was really creative…enjoyed it!


  6. Bodhirose
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 21:56:19

    What fun! You had me until the very end. I’m going to have to work on my fantasy skills. :~)


  7. katiemiafrederick
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 20:24:19

    Well.. Lynn again..
    and while you may be
    enjoying Christmas-like
    weather where you and
    mouse friend are..
    no such
    weather here..
    a balmy 80 degrees
    and still room for
    sunburns for
    the fair


  8. Pleasant Street
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 19:15:52

    So fun! Thank you for this story


  9. Victoria C. Slotto
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 17:13:25

    Oh no! I really laughed out loud at that surprise ending, Lynn. Too fun and shows what imagination can do to an apparently, perfectly sane woman.


  10. Grace
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 16:35:54

    And here I am with all the Christmas decors still to be put up ~ Love the shock of the ending line…he..he…what fun ~ Thanks Lynn for a delightful share and wishing you happy week ~


  11. kanzensakura
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 16:33:30

    Oh what fun! I’ll bet he’s a cute mouse too! And speaking of seasonal cheer, don’t you just love that the WP snow has started up again our on blog pages? First snow for us all…


  12. Sanaa Rizvi (@rizvi_sanaa)
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 16:22:35

    Incredible 😀 love the winter season with all its elements of fantasy in your poem. Beautifully penned.

    Lots of love,


  13. Glenn Buttkus
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 16:00:16

    Wow, what fun, really faked us out. Of mice & men for sure; smiles; nice take on the prompt; smile.


  14. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Dec 01, 2015 @ 15:59:26

    Loved the fantasy here.. Much cuter than what happened to Gregor Samsa, yet something similar.. Fantastic take.


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