a garden lai

This is my attempt at a “lai”.  You can learn more about the form at dVerse

 

look out my window
garden plants on row
i see

green beans, potato,
snap peas, tomato
must weed

good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely

 

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photo by lynn

38 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sumana Roy's avatar Sumana Roy
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 01:10:23

    I love this green piece and all the hard work that goes into it.

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 23:26:24

    There are many gardens in our life… some imaginary and some very real.

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  3. Frank Hubeny's avatar frankhubeny
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:56:31

    Nice gardening lai–planting in rows, weeding and harvesting the blessings.

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  4. SBon's avatar nosaintaugustine
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:00:15

    Aww, I love this. So sweet. Those middle three lines were my favorite.

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  5. Waltermarks's avatar Waltermarks
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 18:19:26

    The garden sounds bountiful. The way I garden doesn’t require weeding. I go to someone else’s for the harvest

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  6. Portofino's avatar Charley
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:59:25

    Are we only talking of gardening here? I have my doubts. Great poem!

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  7. jillys2016's avatar jillys2016
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:37:25

    Simply charming!

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  8. Victoria Young's avatar Victoria Young
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:19:07

    yet it seems gardening and poetry goes hand in hand. How big is your farm?

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  9. Victoria C. Slotto's avatar Victoria C. Slotto
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:14:32

    Oh, I love this because we are ardent gardeners, too. David–the grower, I–the weeder and deadheader. That figures I guess. But I love it…so soul-soothing. You did well with the form.

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  10. whimsygizmo's avatar whimsygizmo
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:03:20

    “must weed” made me giggle…like a little self-to-do list in the middle of all that serene observation. 😉

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