a garden lai

This is my attempt at a “lai”. Β You can learn more about the form at dVerse

 

look out my window
garden plants on row
i see

green beans, potato,
snap peas, tomato
must weed

good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely

 

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photo by lynn

38 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Imelda
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 09:33:42

    πŸ’›

    I like the garden theme especially the analogy at the end.

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  2. colorfulpen
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 08:47:18

    That middle stanza makes me hungry for some garden fresh vegetables, and that last stanza is simply beautiful.

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  3. Grace
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:40:30

    Love the gardening response, specially the ending Lynn ~

    good seeds that we sow
    cause blessings to grow
    freely

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  4. lillian
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 06:51:05

    Good seeds we sow, we love to grow. This reminds me of a beautiful choral piece More Love. If you google “Kevin Siegfried” and go to his website, I think there is a recording of it. You’ll see how well it fits with your piece here πŸ™‚

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  5. Sumana Roy
    Jun 09, 2017 @ 01:10:23

    I love this green piece and all the hard work that goes into it.

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  6. BjΓΆrn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 23:26:24

    There are many gardens in our life… some imaginary and some very real.

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  7. frankhubeny
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:56:31

    Nice gardening lai–planting in rows, weeding and harvesting the blessings.

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  8. nosaintaugustine
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:00:15

    Aww, I love this. So sweet. Those middle three lines were my favorite.

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  9. Waltermarks
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 18:19:26

    The garden sounds bountiful. The way I garden doesn’t require weeding. I go to someone else’s for the harvest

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  10. Charley
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:59:25

    Are we only talking of gardening here? I have my doubts. Great poem!

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  11. jillys2016
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:37:25

    Simply charming!

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  12. Victoria Young
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:19:07

    yet it seems gardening and poetry goes hand in hand. How big is your farm?

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  13. Victoria C. Slotto
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:14:32

    Oh, I love this because we are ardent gardeners, too. David–the grower, I–the weeder and deadheader. That figures I guess. But I love it…so soul-soothing. You did well with the form.

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  14. whimsygizmo
    Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:03:20

    “must weed” made me giggle…like a little self-to-do list in the middle of all that serene observation. πŸ˜‰

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