This is my attempt at a “lai”. Β You can learn more about the form at dVerse…
look out my window
garden plants on row
i see
green beans, potato,
snap peas, tomato
must weed
good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely

photo by lynn
Jun 09, 2017 @ 09:33:42
π
I like the garden theme especially the analogy at the end.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 20:45:15
Thanks, Imelda π
Jun 09, 2017 @ 08:47:18
That middle stanza makes me hungry for some garden fresh vegetables, and that last stanza is simply beautiful.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 14:07:01
Thanks for saying so!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:40:30
Love the gardening response, specially the ending Lynn ~
good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely
Jun 09, 2017 @ 08:09:32
Thanks, Grace…your response was beautiful too!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 06:51:05
Good seeds we sow, we love to grow. This reminds me of a beautiful choral piece More Love. If you google “Kevin Siegfried” and go to his website, I think there is a recording of it. You’ll see how well it fits with your piece here π
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:51:30
Will check it out…thanks, Lillian!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 01:10:23
I love this green piece and all the hard work that goes into it.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:48:53
Thanks, Sumana…green is good π
Jun 08, 2017 @ 23:26:24
There are many gardens in our life… some imaginary and some very real.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:46:51
Yes…humanity was placed in the garden to care for it.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:56:31
Nice gardening lai–planting in rows, weeding and harvesting the blessings.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:00:15
Aww, I love this. So sweet. Those middle three lines were my favorite.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:14:43
Thanks…do you like to garden too?
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:26:47
Yes, I used to garden a lot! Now I mostly look at gardens, which is also nice.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:57:20
I like to see other gardens too π
Jun 08, 2017 @ 18:19:26
The garden sounds bountiful. The way I garden doesn’t require weeding. I go to someone else’s for the harvest
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:14:02
How do you DO that?! Happy harvesting π
Jun 09, 2017 @ 09:33:13
Tell my mother-in-law we’re hungry
Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:59:25
Are we only talking of gardening here? I have my doubts. Great poem!
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:13:07
Glad you caught the spiritual dimension…thanks!
Jun 08, 2017 @ 22:08:32
I have more than one dimension. π
Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:37:25
Simply charming!
Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:19:07
yet it seems gardening and poetry goes hand in hand. How big is your farm?
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:11:47
We farm 500+ acres of corn and soybeans with our second son. My garden plot is smallish but big on rewards π
Jun 08, 2017 @ 21:00:00
Wow, great to hear these kinds of farms are still out there and thriving.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 21:00:53
Yes, there’s more of us out here π Thanks!
Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:14:32
Oh, I love this because we are ardent gardeners, too. David–the grower, I–the weeder and deadheader. That figures I guess. But I love it…so soul-soothing. You did well with the form.
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:09:51
Soul-soothing…yes!
Jun 08, 2017 @ 17:03:20
“must weed” made me giggle…like a little self-to-do list in the middle of all that serene observation. π
Jun 08, 2017 @ 20:09:13
yep…sneaky weeds!