smoke a kyoka

 

frank(ly) i thank ya

not to mess with my tanka

(syllabic rut stuck)

why can’t japanese mora

fit my english euphora?

 


Frank J. Tassone challenges us to “meet the bar” of tanka/kyoka writing at dVerse poets pub.I had learned strict syllabic writing of these forms so was surprised by Frank’s notes:

“Now, a brief word on tanka/kyoka and syllabic writing. Beginners are often taught that both tanka and kyoka need to be written in no more than 31 syllables, usually broken up into a 5-7-5-7-7 pattern.Β  However, an English syllable is a different linguistic unit from a Japanese mora, and the counts refer to mora, not syllable. If an English-language writer of Japanese forms wants to write accurately, the proper syllable count for a haiku/senryu would be 10-12, and a tanka/kyoka 20-24.”

16 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. merrildsmith
    May 23, 2020 @ 11:23:08

    So funny–and clever. It made me smile. πŸ˜€

    Reply

  2. hank77
    May 22, 2020 @ 19:06:15

    kaykuala

    why can’t japanese mora
    fit my english euphora?

    Good question, lynn! Very clever take!

    Hank

    Reply

  3. memadtwo
    May 22, 2020 @ 14:53:42

    You made me smile. (K)

    Reply

  4. Helen Dehner
    May 22, 2020 @ 12:20:15

    Simply ~~~ brilliant.

    Reply

  5. Beverly Crawford
    May 22, 2020 @ 10:40:59

    HA! I love, love, LOVE this one. Delightful sarcasm!

    Reply

  6. Frank Hubeny
    May 22, 2020 @ 06:24:05

    Nice last two lines with mora and euphora.

    Reply

  7. kim881
    May 22, 2020 @ 04:03:22

    A fun tanka, Lynn!

    Reply

  8. peterfrankiswrites
    May 21, 2020 @ 23:48:18

    Very clever and witty. ‘(syllabic rut stuck)’ is a beaut line.

    Reply

  9. Frank J. Tassone
    May 21, 2020 @ 20:14:12

    Hilarious! I only wish I had emojis for this laptop I’m using! A true-grit kyoka, if ever I saw one! brava!

    Reply

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