nuclear fallout

 

it’s good to create

energy in a marriage

a bit of spark adds

excitement to any

couple’s relationship

but negative energy

will backfire on itself;

wound like   [bam]

agitated boomerang

or spring   [zing]

like wristwatch too

tightly wound, no

longer

synchronized

in time

 

together.

 


Lillian challenges us to write a quadrille (44 words) using both pronunciations/meanings of “wound”.  Join us at dVerse poets pub  🙂

32 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 19, 2021 @ 14:40:53

    Ouch, there are those poisonous relationships… once it starts it just gets worse.

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  2. sanaarizvi's avatar sanaarizvi
    May 18, 2021 @ 15:24:35

    This is so evocative. I like the comparison to the wrist watch too tightly wound. 💝💝

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  3. Ingrid's avatar Ingrid
    May 18, 2021 @ 10:07:59

    I like the title and the comparison of positive with negative energy: nice work!

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  4. T.J.S. Sherman's avatar T.J.S. Sherman
    May 18, 2021 @ 09:47:41

    I like how the last lines trend backwards instead of forwards. It calls to my mind science fiction and the things that we dreamed of nuclear power doing (like time travel).

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  5. lillian's avatar lillian
    May 18, 2021 @ 08:18:38

    Love the comparison to the wrist watch too tightly wound. Great use of the homographic pair! 🙂

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  6. ben Alexander's avatar ben Alexander
    May 18, 2021 @ 04:55:14

    👏 Lynn 👏

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  7. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli
    May 17, 2021 @ 21:40:06

    I like your formatting where it’s smooth until tweaking but tweaking can go too far and then things are all over the place, as your formatting shows.

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  8. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry
    May 17, 2021 @ 21:14:32

    Negative energy really does wind us up tight…Great poem Lynn!

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  9. hdwoonie23's avatar Helen Dehner
    May 17, 2021 @ 20:28:58

    Oh yes!! Well done.

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  10. Becoming His Tapestry's avatar Becoming His Tapestry
    May 17, 2021 @ 19:53:09

    Love it, Lynn. Your writing are always on point

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