in forest,
a dark twig
lifted its whisper
my lips,
voice crying
cracked, torn
something
secret hidden by
muffled, moist leaves
waken from
dreaming, drifting
fragrance of conscious
mind roots
i left behind, lost,
wounded by wandering
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“Found”poem taken from Pablo Neruda’s “Lost in the Forest”:
Lost in the forest, I broke off a dark twig
and lifted its whisper to my thirsty lips:
maybe it was the voice of the rain crying,
a cracked bell, or a torn heart.Something from far off it seemed
deep and secret to me, hidden by the earth,
a shout muffled by huge autumns,
by the moist half-open darkness of the leaves.Wakening from the dreaming forest there, the hazel-sprig
sang under my tongue, its drifting fragrance
climbed up through my conscious mindas if suddenly the roots I had left behind
cried out to me, the land I had lost with my childhood–
and I stopped, wounded by the wandering scent.
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Jan 09, 2022 @ 07:20:32
The expressionism created in this poem is really authentic.
Hails for the post
Jan 09, 2022 @ 14:22:39
Thank you for commenting.
Oct 21, 2021 @ 13:39:43
The way you have cut away at the words of the original has exposed a deeper despair – so well crafted Lynn.
Oct 22, 2021 @ 09:08:18
Thank you.
Oct 21, 2021 @ 09:38:29
I love the way you’ve crystallized the poem. (K)
Oct 20, 2021 @ 18:39:12
Nice job of cutting to the core Lynn. Strong!
Oct 20, 2021 @ 13:29:21
I found this even darker… there is not even hope for the lost wanderer.
Oct 20, 2021 @ 17:02:57
We are all in search of hope…
Oct 19, 2021 @ 22:45:24
👌👌👌✒️🌹
Oct 19, 2021 @ 18:17:29
I’m sure Neruda would approve of this. Wow. And with less words. Excellent. Thanks.
Oct 20, 2021 @ 07:55:34
I’m flattered by your comments, Selma.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 17:59:55
The found poem is sharper and sadder than Neruda’s original, where the pain stands out more acutely.
Oct 20, 2021 @ 04:17:29
Yes! It’s so… hope-less…
-David
Oct 20, 2021 @ 08:12:03
Without hope is saddest of all wanderings.
Oct 20, 2021 @ 07:54:09
I appreciate your saying so, Lisa.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:41:10
Far from whimsical, your version invades the shadows and the stony heart; excellent “found” version.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 16:32:56
i appreciate that, Glenn.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:39:53
Bravo Lynn – this is Neruda pared to the bone and what you include speaks volumes!
Oct 19, 2021 @ 16:33:30
Thanks much, Laura!
Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:26:48
This is bleaker than the original. There’s much more of a feeling of damage here.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 16:31:58
Never to be the same, I fear.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:16:57
Amazing parsing of Neruda’s words here.
Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:23:21
i thank you…and Neruda.