lost (a found poem)

in forest,
a dark twig
lifted its whisper

my lips,
voice crying
cracked, torn

something
secret hidden by
muffled, moist leaves

waken from
dreaming, drifting
fragrance of conscious

mind roots
i left behind, lost,
wounded by wandering

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“Found”poem taken from Pablo Neruda’s “Lost in the Forest”:

Lost in the forest, I broke off a dark twig
and lifted its whisper to my thirsty lips:
maybe it was the voice of the rain crying,
a cracked bell, or a torn heart.

Something from far off it seemed
deep and secret to me, hidden by the earth,
a shout muffled by huge autumns,
by the moist half-open darkness of the leaves.

Wakening from the dreaming forest there, the hazel-sprig
sang under my tongue, its drifting fragrance
climbed up through my conscious mind

as if suddenly the roots I had left behind
cried out to me, the land I had lost with my childhood–
and I stopped, wounded by the wandering scent.

 


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21 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. writingwhatnots
    Oct 21, 2021 @ 13:39:43

    The way you have cut away at the words of the original has exposed a deeper despair – so well crafted Lynn.

    Reply

  2. memadtwo
    Oct 21, 2021 @ 09:38:29

    I love the way you’ve crystallized the poem. (K)

    Reply

  3. robtkistner
    Oct 20, 2021 @ 18:39:12

    Nice job of cutting to the core Lynn. Strong!

    Reply

  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Oct 20, 2021 @ 13:29:21

    I found this even darker… there is not even hope for the lost wanderer.

    Reply

  5. mic
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 22:45:24

    👌👌👌✒️🌹

    Reply

  6. SelmaMartin
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 18:17:29

    I’m sure Neruda would approve of this. Wow. And with less words. Excellent. Thanks.

    Reply

  7. msjadeli
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 17:59:55

    The found poem is sharper and sadder than Neruda’s original, where the pain stands out more acutely.

    Reply

  8. Glenn A. Buttkus
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:41:10

    Far from whimsical, your version invades the shadows and the stony heart; excellent “found” version.

    Reply

  9. Laura Bloomsbury
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:39:53

    Bravo Lynn – this is Neruda pared to the bone and what you include speaks volumes!

    Reply

  10. sarahsouthwest
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:26:48

    This is bleaker than the original. There’s much more of a feeling of damage here.

    Reply

  11. ByteSizedStudio
    Oct 19, 2021 @ 15:16:57

    Amazing parsing of Neruda’s words here.

    Reply

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