freaking totalled

Hanging out at dVerse Poets Pub with Lillian’s theme: It’s all in the timing…


freight train slows slightly

unmarked crossing ahead

pick-up driver approaches

eyes on cellular de-vice

engineer lays on horn:

whaaaaaa – whaa – whaa!


conductor squirms/gasps

“We’re gonna hit him!”



oh deer! in headlights stare

driver brakes in nick of time

dull thunk… huge iron horse

deflects truck like a pop can

spins away from death’s rails

truck and driver leaking fluid.

21 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sanaa Rizvi
    Dec 15, 2016 @ 13:41:40

    Such an artful response to the prompt.. my heart jumped a little!


  2. katiemiafrederick
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 23:11:11

    Hello Lynn
    again.. sort
    of near the end
    for now.. and oh
    Goodness.. the freight train
    literal and metaphor has
    so many
    through tunnels
    oF liGht or NoT..;)


  3. janicead
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 18:49:19

    Oh, my, yes, leaking all around.


  4. Victoria C. Slotto
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 17:08:47

    We had a similar incident here in Northern Nevada not long ago, but there were a number who didn’t make it. We are not far from the train tracks that run along the I-80 corridor. If he is the engineer that lays on his whistle on Thursday morning around 2 AM, please ask him to cool it! Just teasing. There used to be one who did that long-long-short-long wail and it made you think he was angry at all of us who got to sleep. It’s better now.


    • lynn__
      Dec 14, 2016 @ 19:54:29

      Yes, my son is an engineer and gets feedback like this 😉 If there’s been an accident, sometimes they’re required to sound horn more often on future runs.


  5. Grace
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 16:52:09

    Such a terrifying encounter ~ It happens everyday here too with trains and animals on the long stretch of road ~ Take care Lynn ~


  6. Misky
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 14:49:16

    Scary stuff, Lynn.


  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 13:25:12

    The de-vice here is so clever… and what a sad tale of waste, and so many victims beside the driver of the truck… I couldn’t hit like on this (though it was well written)


  8. Janice
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 10:02:03

    A tale in itself told in an artful way. The de-vice reference is perfect.


  9. Waltermarks
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 09:41:27

    Both he and the train were leaking, i’ll bet, ha ha! You had me on the edge of my seat


  10. lillian
    Dec 14, 2016 @ 07:59:12

    Oh my……I hope you are not in this narrative! Railroad crossings and drivers of any kind with cellphone in hand are definitely not a good mix. Inclusion of the deer in headlights and huge iron horse…good mentions here within this poetic narrative. So glad to see you here today! 🙂


    • lynn__
      Dec 14, 2016 @ 08:04:06

      My son is an engineer…this sort of thing happens too often! Thanks, Lillian…glad to be here. (The pick-up driver is glad to still be here too!)


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