energetic blond boy invades our home
it’s so much fun the second time around
he dumps out all the legos on the floor
then drives his toy backhoe across the couch
he brings grandma another book to read
next climbs in grandpa’s lap to eat popcorn
his uncles he adores; follows footsteps
pulls on his boots (wrong feet) to go outdoors
he likes to chase the cats or moo at cows
he’s happy when he’s playing in the dirt
by day’s end we’re all ready for our beds
he reaches out to hug our necks goodnight!
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*”blank verse” (no rhyme) written in iambic pentameter (see MTB with Tony at d’Verse)
Mar 30, 2014 @ 13:18:31
Smiling… I am looking forward to these days!
Mar 29, 2014 @ 12:42:23
Just a lovely poem thanks for sharing such a joyous time!
Mar 28, 2014 @ 18:18:01
Clever, and all true. There’s love packed into those lines, and frustration too. It’s always worth the effort though, isn’t it? All packed into iambic pent – which is a bit of work too!
Mar 28, 2014 @ 18:09:03
Ha….great 10 lines , blank verse well done…I can relate!
Mar 28, 2014 @ 05:18:48
Oh the energy they can have.. Nice pace in your piece.. Like a little boy running back and forth.
Mar 28, 2014 @ 03:00:10
Very sweet, lots of energy here … he invades your home and your heart, eh? 🙂
Mar 27, 2014 @ 23:24:54
I feel tired reading your poem, Lynndiane! I love how you have expressed your grandson’s energy.
Mar 28, 2014 @ 02:47:22
Thanks, Gabriella (he’s in bed…but not asleep)!
Mar 27, 2014 @ 23:22:14
I can feel the love in this.
Mar 28, 2014 @ 02:49:56
yep, he’s stolen my ❤
Mar 27, 2014 @ 23:00:15
You have to wonder where children get all their energy from!
If this were my poem, I’d smooth the meter in the last line a little, perhaps like this:
by day’s end we’re all ready for our beds.
Your meter and flow are so precise up to that point that it seems a shame not to finish as you started.
Mar 28, 2014 @ 02:52:30
Thanks, Tony, for the editing tip…and all the background information you gave in this “meeting the bar” challenge…lots of food for thought!
Mar 27, 2014 @ 22:45:57
Ha, those grandchildren definitely can be exhausting, can’t they? I understand your sentiments firsthand. Been there, done that! (But it is all worth it, isn’t it?)
Mar 28, 2014 @ 02:54:14
Hi Mary…yes, they’re definitely worth it all 🙂