blues on a window(pain)

Linking “cloud” quadrille (44 word poem) with dVerse Poets…(photo by lynn)

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monday mood

in layers of grey

lowering, glowering

clouds are shrouds

for secret fears

and private tears

as each soul

only knows of

its own sorrows;

cannot fathom another’s

though true sisters/brothers

might try to sigh

with kindred spirit’s cry

in overcast

empathy.

 


“Each heart knows its own bitterness…  ” -Proverbs 14:10

37 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 23:23:05

    The weight of Monday is so much felt… maybe not even compassion can warn sometimes

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  2. whimsygizmo's avatar whimsygizmo
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 21:59:36

    Perfect somber tone achieved here. Just lovely.

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  3. Grace's avatar Grace
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 19:22:10

    I can relate to those kind of grey days ~ Good thing today was a beautiful sun-lit day ~ Hope you are well Lynn ~

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  4. Arcadia (@MissArcadia)'s avatar Arcadia (@MissArcadia)
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 19:11:03

    Well written. Really like the photo – it really connected with this piece.

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  5. Frank Hubeny's avatar frankhubeny
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 18:17:31

    Nice closeup of the drops on the window. I like the idea of empathy being our window to another and also what blocks us from fully fathoming the other.

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  6. paulscribbles's avatar paulscribbles
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 17:29:55

    Monday monday can’t trust that day…….https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h81Ojd3d2rY

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  7. Brian's avatar Brian
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 17:22:21

    We can never know another’s cloud, only react to the lessened light beneath its shadow.

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  8. kim881's avatar kim881
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 16:34:21

    Have you had a cloudy Monday too, Lynn? Your Quadrille has a lyrical lilt – the rhymes give it a wonderful little kick, despite the grey undertones, especially ‘lowering, glowering /
    clouds are shrouds’.
    I think we all have those times when we retreat behind our own clouds.

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  9. Victoria C. Slotto's avatar Victoria C. Slotto
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 13:27:51

    Love what you did with this, Lynn. It’s that kind of day here–so easy to withdraw and stay within oneself. But so important now to reach out to others

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  10. Linda L. Kruschke's avatar Linda Kruschke
    Oct 10, 2016 @ 12:18:07

    Great use of the given word today. I believe, however, that it is when we share our sorrow and listen to the sorrow of others that we live compassion. And compassion heals the wounds of sorrow.

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