blurb on da burbs

middle-class resides
huddled
somewhere in middle
muddled
‘tween everywhere/now(here)
befuddled

dead doors safely
bolt-lock
living close(d) to neighbors
on block
empty chairs fill porches
undocked

choice of school (lots) pay
to play
public schoolers should not
(not) pray
buses take young snotty
tots away

hard(est)-working to
impress
absent dad hopes mom
knows best
all seem blessed, why sooo
depressed?


Check out dVerse Poetics, where Oloriel invites us to submit “suburban poems”

20 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Imelda
    Feb 26, 2017 @ 17:54:54

    “empty chairs fill porches” – this image captures the suburban vibe. 🙂

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  2. writerwannabe763
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 17:57:09

    Your poem is certainly close to how those in suburbs live…. Diane

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  3. Oloriel
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 16:56:04

    I really love the form, it was twisting and turning, and you raise some excellent and sad points.

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  4. Grace
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 11:50:12

    I like your sharp blurbs on the da burbs ~ Depressing is mild, I say ~ Enjoyed this one Lynn and clever title too !

    Reply

  5. Beverly Crawford
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 10:46:43

    What clever and catchy rhyming. It encapsulates it all in a most enjoyable read!

    Reply

  6. Annell Livingston
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 09:43:46

    Perfectly done! You captured it all.

    Reply

  7. Janice
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 09:22:31

    I like this poem—the wordplay is well done and the depiction of lives. Your poem along with others I have read is getting me to think more about suburbs…there are many experiences rich, middle class and poor outside a city –at least outside the one I was last in (Toronto)…

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    • lynn__
      Feb 23, 2017 @ 09:57:17

      I appreciate your thoughtful comments, Janice. I grew up in the big city, now live rural.

      Reply

      • Janice
        Feb 23, 2017 @ 20:29:40

        I now live rural near a small city, grew up in a bigger city, and lived for many years downtown and in suburbs of an even larger city….(for what that’s worth 😉

  8. Sumana Roy
    Feb 23, 2017 @ 00:41:46

    “all seems blessed, why sooo / depressed?” how perfectly you’ve captivated this ailment of our modern times in the lines…we’re so alienated…sigh…

    Reply

  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 22, 2017 @ 23:10:03

    Love those rhymes.. like repetititio of the monotone.

    Reply

  10. frankhubeny
    Feb 22, 2017 @ 21:47:22

    I liked these lines: “dead doors safely
    bolt-lock”

    Reply

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