This is my attempt at a “lai”. Â You can learn more about the form at dVerse…
look out my window
garden plants on row
i see
green beans, potato,
snap peas, tomato
must weed
good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely

photo by lynn
posting poetic prose
08 Jun 2017 38 Comments
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This is my attempt at a “lai”. Â You can learn more about the form at dVerse…
look out my window
garden plants on row
i see
green beans, potato,
snap peas, tomato
must weed
good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely

photo by lynn
Jun 11, 2017 @ 00:36:00
Such a delightful read! A very beautiful poem.
Jun 11, 2017 @ 07:07:36
Thank you for reading and commenting!
Jun 11, 2017 @ 07:19:50
No problem at all!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 15:24:28
There’s something about this form that produces brisk, no nonsense poems. I like your notes to self and imagine the plants standing to attention in their rows.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 20:46:19
Yes 😉
Jun 10, 2017 @ 03:50:05
🙂
Jun 09, 2017 @ 09:33:42
💛
I like the garden theme especially the analogy at the end.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 20:45:15
Thanks, Imelda 🙂
Jun 09, 2017 @ 08:47:18
That middle stanza makes me hungry for some garden fresh vegetables, and that last stanza is simply beautiful.
Jun 09, 2017 @ 14:07:01
Thanks for saying so!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:40:30
Love the gardening response, specially the ending Lynn ~
good seeds that we sow
cause blessings to grow
freely
Jun 09, 2017 @ 08:09:32
Thanks, Grace…your response was beautiful too!
Jun 09, 2017 @ 06:51:05
Good seeds we sow, we love to grow. This reminds me of a beautiful choral piece More Love. If you google “Kevin Siegfried” and go to his website, I think there is a recording of it. You’ll see how well it fits with your piece here 🙂
Jun 09, 2017 @ 07:51:30
Will check it out…thanks, Lillian!