Linking to dVerse poetics and Lillian’s prompt to write “once upon a …”
once upon a yurt…
out on the barren steppe
below snowy mountain peak
where mongolian ponies gallop
beside smoky cow-dung fire ring
stirring pot of seasoned beef stew
aromas of ginger and garlic wafting
tickle nose of almond-eyed baby boy
who sneezes mightily into shadows of
future as conqueror-to-be, Genghis Khan
a poem in my pocket 
Nov 03, 2018 @ 04:20:35
Oh I like this one. A snapshot in time, chronicling the beginning of a long, dark shadow. The sensory elements really make this poem pop.
Nov 03, 2018 @ 08:19:56
Thank you for reading…i appreciate your comments 🙂
Oct 31, 2018 @ 21:22:39
Even Genghis Khan was once a baby.
Oct 31, 2018 @ 22:29:40
Dependent and vulnerable…even sweet?
Oct 31, 2018 @ 18:19:59
How you managed each line to be just a bit longer than the one before fascinated me, and I loved the progression of the story as well!
Oct 31, 2018 @ 18:23:12
Thank you very much, Bev 🙂
Oct 31, 2018 @ 16:20:57
Oh I knew from the title where you were going… but every big man has once been a little boy…
Oct 31, 2018 @ 10:18:33
this definitely caught me off guard – for its originality — I was enchanted to be drawn outside, and your details were just perfect …. and then! Boom! At this point, I did start laughing … it delighted me; so every child, is, essentially, a child, with humble roots … as to where they end up?
this has the flavour of the good old-fashioned fable to it … well done!
Oct 31, 2018 @ 10:24:00
Thanks, Pat, for your thoughtful reading and comment. Glad to delight you!
Oct 31, 2018 @ 07:40:41
once upon a yurt…..sets us in the out-of-doors. And these words add wonder to th scene:
“aromas of ginger and garlic wafting
tickle nose of almond-eyed baby boy”
Nice full circle from the title to the last words: Genghis Khan. Temuchin is Genghis Khan. Love this tale you’ve given us – a beginning tale.
Oct 31, 2018 @ 08:03:37
Thanks, Lillian…it surprised me how the story led. “Temuchin!” sounds like a sneeze to me 🙂
Oct 31, 2018 @ 06:06:37
a sense of being in the moment of this once upon an outdoor adventure, the smells lend an extra bit of dimension
Oct 31, 2018 @ 08:01:31
Thanks, Gina 🙂