new horizons

A “troiku” linked to Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. A troiku takes original haiku and make three new haiku beginning with lines from the original.

Original haiku, inspired by Jane Reichhold’s haiku:

the night is shortened

dark clouds disappear at dawn

with a rising sun

My troiku, using lines of original:

the night is shortened

when sweetly blessed with deep sleep

awaken refreshed

dark clouds disappear

stars now slowly extinguish

and clear dawn will break

with a rising sun

tea time on new patio

you and i greet day

6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. poetrybydebi
    May 11, 2022 @ 10:59:05

    I wasn’t exactly sure how to do this. I’m bad with directions. Your is cohesive and lovely

    Reply

  2. Mellow Curmudgeon
    May 04, 2022 @ 09:10:27

    The “pretty good” comment is an understatement.  All the pieces of this response to a tricky challenge fit together with beauty and ingenuity reminiscent of the best proofs in math.

    Reply

  3. Becoming His Tapestry
    May 02, 2022 @ 18:50:25

    Thatโ€™s pretty good Lynn

    Reply

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