vitiligo orribile

deep in dark woods stood

bow hunter’s cabin where he’d

left his  daughter that night

reclined near stone hearth

in dying warmth of fire’s embers

lone persona lost to her reading

a yellowed manuscript, an

epochal allegory held in hand,

empty pewter plate on table

she never noticed pair of

luminous eyes in window or

pernicious shadow pushing

open the cabin door…


Anthony’s challenge to create poem from random gnarly words…used 10 of 12 words


20 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. ManicDdaily
    Jun 01, 2014 @ 20:01:25

    Really scary! Great setting of mood and atmosphere. k.


  2. Victoria C. Slotto
    May 29, 2014 @ 17:51:45

    Oh yikes. Ominous and a bit chilling. Great story that could morph into a piece of fiction.


  3. mishunderstood
    May 28, 2014 @ 22:22:17

    Oh my! Part two…please! 🙂


  4. Anthony Desmond (@iamEPanthony)
    May 28, 2014 @ 21:37:23

    Hmm… so what happened next? spill it! smiles… this tale was creepy… left me hanging at the end! nice


  5. jo-hanna
    May 28, 2014 @ 17:34:01

    Creepy I’m glad you stopped there …


  6. Mary
    May 28, 2014 @ 14:10:27

    Whew, your poem caused my heart to beat fast. Very effective writing. You created a vivid scene, pulled the reader in, and then left the reader to ponder what happened next!


  7. pandamoniumcat
    May 28, 2014 @ 10:03:39

    OOoooooh what happens next?? A little shiver at the end and I could see those luminous eyes… eerie indeed!


  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 28, 2014 @ 04:25:28

    Oh like something beastly coming at the poor girl.. Luminous eyes is usually not a good sign (even if it would be her father)


  9. writerwannabe763
    May 28, 2014 @ 03:59:38

    Foreboding!!! Diane


  10. bmiller007 (@bmiller007)
    May 28, 2014 @ 03:02:43

    what fate is about to meet her
    is it dark
    or just her dad
    coming home…?


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