a perfect storm

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cocktail clouds

mind’s darkening spanse as toxicity

to geriatric brain wreaks chemical jarring

of thought process;  hallucinations condense

in shower of nonsensical stories

that plop randomly from

slurred lips onto wary

ears of unnerved

family members

in search

of cover









A quadrille (44 word poem) submitted to dVerse Poets on “jar” theme. 

22 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. daa1915
    Aug 24, 2016 @ 14:33:51

    Evocative poem for me; we’ve been through it with my husband’s mom. I love the words AND the shape.


  2. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Aug 18, 2016 @ 05:43:02

    Well described and cleverly shaped.


  3. writerwannabe763
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 20:31:04

    You have such a talent for so many kinds of poetry. Reality of growing old.. captured in your poem.. Diane


  4. Grace
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 17:27:21

    Love the format and ending lines…as if we are waiting for an ending. Good one Lynn. Sending you virtual hugs.


  5. Arcadia (@MissArcadia)
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 17:16:15

    Great poem. I like the shape of this piece, with the lines and words shortening until the last word, which sort dripped across the page. Similar to one’s thought processing when one is impaired.


  6. Anita Lubesh
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 14:57:18

    Beautiful format to condense your words to the final drip.


  7. Bodhirose
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 13:34:11

    I think that in some cases what we think is dementia may be the side effects of over medication. Drugs are powerful chemicals and often the elderly are on several prescriptions and often their doctors don’t know…or don’t care, about how they can cause big problems. We’ve had to stay very vigilant about that with our 90 year old mother. I love how you shaped your poem to come down to that last word…well done!


  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Aug 17, 2016 @ 02:06:26

    So sad.. not yet there yet… but I can relate so well with my mother in dementia… very much among clouds.


  9. Victoria Young
    Aug 16, 2016 @ 23:14:11

    I meant in-laws- autocorrect!!!


  10. Victoria Young
    Aug 16, 2016 @ 23:12:50

    I’m assuming you have aging parents/enclaves who are suffering. This is beautifully expressed and really shows how hard it is. Great piece of work, Lynn!


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