a piece of land

I.

Look across heartland’s dry

acres of

 

dirt.

 

 

II.

Precious prairie humus

treasured black

 

loam.

 

 

III.

Heavy downpour cuts land,

stealing rich

 

soil.

 

 

_________

 

Link to d’Verse with Kelvin’s original “Tilus” form of 3 lines: 6, 3, 1 syllable each.

“Tilus” (tee-loo-hz) means  “piece of land” (Finnish) so that’s where I went, naturally.

17 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. ManicDdaily's avatar ManicDdaily
    May 20, 2014 @ 01:42:26

    You use this form so well. So sad! Thanks. k.

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  2. CC Champagne's avatar CC Champagne
    May 18, 2014 @ 13:02:50

    This really gives a sense of a destitute landscape craving rain, but when it comes there’s always too much of it… Lovely!

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  3. billgncs's avatar billgncs
    May 17, 2014 @ 16:04:11

    yes! Just right!

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  4. kelvin s.m.'s avatar kelvin s.m.
    May 17, 2014 @ 00:27:36

    You have the form perfectly done—yes! And you are right, Tilus is also a Finish word that means “piece of land”. Fantastic first attempts! Thank you, smiles.

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  5. Bryan Ens's avatar Bryan Ens
    May 16, 2014 @ 15:34:31

    I pictured a farm during the dirty 30s (not that I was around then)…so dry, but when rain DID come, it stripped away what was there, rather than nourishing.

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  6. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 16, 2014 @ 12:56:05

    So much strength is needed for a farmer.. rain is too little or too much.. love how each tilus showed a different angle to rain and soil

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