a piece of land

I.

Look across heartland’s dry

acres of

 

dirt.

 

 

II.

Precious prairie humus

treasured black

 

loam.

 

 

III.

Heavy downpour cuts land,

stealing rich

 

soil.

 

 

_________

 

Link to d’Verse with Kelvin’s original “Tilus” form of 3 lines: 6, 3, 1 syllable each.

“Tilus” (tee-loo-hz) means  “piece of land” (Finnish) so that’s where I went, naturally.

17 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. billgncs
    May 17, 2014 @ 16:04:11

    yes! Just right!

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  2. kelvin s.m.
    May 17, 2014 @ 00:27:36

    You have the form perfectly done—yes! And you are right, Tilus is also a Finish word that means “piece of land”. Fantastic first attempts! Thank you, smiles.

    Reply

  3. Bryan Ens
    May 16, 2014 @ 15:34:31

    I pictured a farm during the dirty 30s (not that I was around then)…so dry, but when rain DID come, it stripped away what was there, rather than nourishing.

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  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 16, 2014 @ 12:56:05

    So much strength is needed for a farmer.. rain is too little or too much.. love how each tilus showed a different angle to rain and soil

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  5. lynndiane
    May 16, 2014 @ 12:50:25

    Thanks to all for your refreshing comments…i ache to see fields erode…hard sometimes for my farmer to take weather as it comes…

    Reply

  6. Mary
    May 16, 2014 @ 12:13:51

    A nice set. I like the way you gave three different perspectives on the same subject. Rain definitely has a mind of its own….and when there is drought or very heavy destructive rain, it can be so devastating.

    Reply

  7. MarinaSofia
    May 16, 2014 @ 09:51:38

    Deep, deep love of the soil expressed there. Hope the weather calms down for you a little. It feels like it’s going to be another of those years…

    Reply

  8. Gabriella
    May 16, 2014 @ 08:48:08

    I like how you make us feel as well as see your ‘piece of land’, lynndiane.

    Reply

  9. Sumana Roy
    May 16, 2014 @ 07:41:32

    i like the contrasting images…specially the 1st and the 3rd one…

    Reply

  10. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    May 16, 2014 @ 05:03:44

    This form encompasses o many different uses — I like the pictures you have painted here.

    Reply

  11. claudia
    May 16, 2014 @ 04:08:50

    nice.. the prairie humus one makes me wanna dig my hands in the soil

    Reply

  12. Glenn Buttkus
    May 16, 2014 @ 03:43:22

    Tilus from the Heartland; poetics with soil lips, how grand. Tilus 2 whispered loudly to me, laughing at my brown thumb; reminding me to think greener.

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  13. Victoria C. Slotto
    May 16, 2014 @ 02:53:50

    Beautiful portrait of the Midwest. Loved especially the loamy one.

    Reply

  14. bmiller007 (@bmiller007)
    May 16, 2014 @ 02:52:48

    the rain gives and takes. its pouring here right now…it will feed the trees…where drought has been and the land is so hard…it would be devastating…

    Reply

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