Kim at dVerse Poets hosts “rain” quadrille (44 words) prompt this week…
mist hangs thin veil
covers landscape,
shrouds horizon.
sky heavy with humidity
air’s mood presses in,
mildly claustrophobic;
when clouds cannot rain.
hair hangs thick veil
covers face,
shrouds emotion.
heart heavy with futility
mind’s mood presses in,
wildly claustrophobic;
when tears cannot reign.
a poem in my pocket 
May 27, 2018 @ 20:08:50
Such meticulously crafted mirroring of the mental with the physical, Lynn. Interesting title too, about the uncontainability of pressure. Rings true for many a claustrophobic heart in this claustrophobic world.
May 28, 2018 @ 17:27:32
Thanks for your insightful comments, Colin. I appreciate that you took time to consider.
May 24, 2018 @ 00:21:45
The claustrophobia aspect is interesting here: how it’s not the dissipation of the clouds that would be freeing but the release of the pent up moisture.
May 24, 2018 @ 08:12:48
Exactly!
May 23, 2018 @ 20:18:08
Oh I can feel this, the containment of pressure and emotion waiting for release. I love the way the two stanzas mirror each other.
May 24, 2018 @ 08:13:44
Thanks for your comments, Mish 🙂
May 22, 2018 @ 18:52:33
The echo is so well done, Lynn! And you have captured the mood(s) wonderfully.
May 22, 2018 @ 21:22:59
Thanks,Jilly…I appreciate your comments!
May 22, 2018 @ 18:17:50
kaykuala
The weather can reign in its power and makes one feel claustrophobic having to stay indoors!
Hank
May 22, 2018 @ 17:46:15
I feel both are heavy with emotions, containing itself, rather than spilling out ~ Well done Lynn ~
May 22, 2018 @ 22:43:47
Yes, that’s it…thank you, Grace.
May 22, 2018 @ 14:35:55
The parallel between the weather and the emotion… waiting for rain, waiting for tears… the pressure building
May 22, 2018 @ 15:42:58
Yes, a dam’s gonna spill over, i think
May 22, 2018 @ 13:07:47
This piece feels claustrophobic — well done!
May 22, 2018 @ 15:43:26
Thanks, Jo 🙂
May 22, 2018 @ 12:44:20
I’m sorry I only just got around to reading your quadrille, Lynn – the day kind of got in the way!
I like the imagery and love the play on words in the title and the lines::
‘mildly claustrophobic;
when clouds cannot rain’
and
‘wildly claustrophobic;
when tears cannot reign’..
May 22, 2018 @ 15:44:33
No apology necessary…thanks, Kim, for a great prompt!
May 23, 2018 @ 00:57:53
I’m glad you joined us!
May 22, 2018 @ 10:52:57
I love the staccato feel of this, and the double “rain/reign.” Perfect.
May 22, 2018 @ 15:45:54
Thanks for your comment, De!
May 22, 2018 @ 09:19:42
It does seem more claustrophobic when the clouds can’t rain.
May 22, 2018 @ 09:20:39
…and they hang low to the earth. Thank, Frank.
May 22, 2018 @ 08:15:48
This is absolutely awe-inspiring Lynn! 💜💜
May 22, 2018 @ 08:18:22
Thank you so much, Sanaa!